Rhetorical Essay Final


An Analysis of the Health Care System

Imagine a little girl is in the hospital and her parents find that she has just been diagnosed with a cancer and had a large tumor in her abdomen. The doctor assures them that this type of cancer is highly curable. Unfortunately, while recovering from chemotherapy she died from an overdose of sodium chloride from an IV bag because of a mindless error. This is a reality for a girl named Emily and her family as they had deal with the preventable loss of their daughter’s life (3). The current system we have clearly has problems which put numerous communities at unnecessary risk. Eric Dishmen’s Ted Talk, Health Care Should be a Sports Team, focuses on the need for a new system of communication between specialist health care provides as well as their patients will make a major impact on the current healthcare system. Dishmen uses ethos, pathos, and logos to express how there is a serious need to improve the health care system through better communication between specialist and doctors as well as increased patient interactions in their own health.


Dishmen’s talk about health care takes a critical look at at some of the major flaws he has seen in the system as well as his own personal experiences. Several times throughout his life he had been on the receiving end of medical mistakes which happened to him early on in his childhood. After he had gone into a hospital get surgery on a broken elbow, he had spent time recovering in a hospital bed where he happened to get bed sores which quickly became infected. To help battle of this infection while he recovered, he was given antibiotics. Unfortunately for Dishmen no one had taken into account his allergy to the antibiotic they used on him which caused him to break out and caused his infection to spread across his body.  Later on in his college years he had been diagnosed by several doctors with two rare type of kidney disease which they told him would destroy his kidneys along with cancer-like cell in his immune system. They told him because of his unique circumstance he’ll never be eligible to receive a kidney transplant and to make matters worst they told him he only had about two to three years left to life. As of today he has proved them wrong as he was told that twenty-eight years ago living with a new transplant kidney he was told wouldn’t work for him (1). Dishmen had faced more than his fair share of trials and hardships do to miscommunications in hospitals. Now these days Dishmen is a medical tech specialist looking to make a difference in with new ways of think and dealing with medical impacts on patients and their finances.

Patients being wrongful treated in hospitals is know as medical malpractice. The most common type of malpractice today stems from misdiagnoses and/or delayed diagnoses. This can be very dangerous for a patient as they could have missed critical treatment options that could prevented the disease progress or even death. Along with this, it's stated that 1.5 million patients a year are harmed from medical errors which most commonly associated with prescription drugs. The two most common ways that this is a problem is when their doctor gives the wrong dosage and when a nurse administers the incorrect amount of the prescription which leads to overdoses (2). These minor errors can be incredibly severe to a patient’s health as well as costly.  


Dishmen’s argues that the system used in hospitals and clinics are too outdated and needs to be modernized. This is a logo based argument that uses the specific strategy of facts to convince the reader. His ethos come from research he had down on the system of health care. Dishmen has been on both ends of the spectrum as a patient and a specialist and since the disconnect on both ends. He stated his thought on that matter saying, “Humans invented the idea of hospitals and clinics in the 1780s. It is time to update our thinking. (1)” His used this data based on facts to show the reader just how obsolete the overall ideas used in our healthcare system today are. This shows the reader a new light on how there are being treated. He hopes that this data will bring shock to the audience and give rise to new thinking to reform our health care. Dishmen displaced factual evidence on the health care system and how it's time to take it into a new direction. His new style of thanking is an important piece to making a new health care system.    

Eric Dishmen had talked about how he had witnessed first hand how hospitals are outdated and that it can cause serious repercussion for a patient. His argument is based on ethos as he has personal experienced this multiple times in his life. He stated in the video “Recovering from the surgery in the hospital, I get bedsores. Those bed sores become infected, and they give me an antibiotic which I end up being allergic to, and now my whole body breaks out, and now all of those become infected. (1)” This quote confirms how minor mistakes that could have been easily prevented can have a serious consequence. His knowledge on patient care as well as his work in the field has lead he to believe that the entire system needs to be reconstructed. This quote shows how he believes that the system in use isn’t cutting it and there is room for improvement. He is hopeful in the idea that we will be able the reshape our health care to something more beneficial for their patients. Dishmen displaced his knowledge and how a new direction needs to be taken. His new style of thanking is an important piece to making a new health care system.    

In Eric Dickmen’s speech, he claims how people would rather avoid taking a trip hospital as it can lead to other difficulties. He based this ethos off his own personal experiences as he knows the extent it can reach. Dishmen has witnessed first hand how a hospital visit can go wrong. He stated, “because these places are often the wrong tool, and the most expensive tool, for the job.” He had personally experienced as he said, “Three different specialists had prescribed three different versions of the same drug to me. I did not have a heart problem. I had an overdose problem. (1)” As a patient, it can be incredibly difficult, confusing, and frustrating to deal with. His understanding of how going to the hospital can get oneself sicker stems from his own mistreat which could lead to any kind of consciences. This type of thing should not happen if things were more closely monitored. This shows how the current system lacks any checks and balance which leads to an increase sickness and be costly.

Dishmen states in his talk, Health Care Should be a Sports Team, how he believes people need to also rely more on themselves and play a greater role when it comes to their health care. This argument is based on pathos as he identifies with his audience as well as his medical credibility. His pathos is grounded from the strategy of promise of gaining more control in their health. During his speech he took out a small ultrasound scanner that he connected to his phone and said, “So we're going to actually do a live exam… (1)” He also stated “I want to use technology that we're all working on and making happen to make health care a coordinated team sport.” He showed his audience first hand how he gave himself a role in his own health care along with the assists of his doctors and specialist. His quote showed how advocates this new take on care as he performances a major medical test on something as easy as a smartphone which is a very universal tool in society.


In conclusion, Dishmen made several vital points on the importance of creating new style of health care. As a known professional and patient, Dishman’s is in the best possible position to make statements on this topic as it moves him personally. This issue has constantly been plaguing our country in the shades and this problem needs to be brought to the public. This minor miscommunication plans can very easily happen to anyone regardless of age or status. His speech was a very effective mean of displaying the urgency of this issue by using his not only his intellect, but by sharing his personal accounts with the audience.










Work Citied:

  1. Dishman, Eric, director. Health Care Should Be a Team Sport. Ted.com, Ted, 2013, www.ted.com/talks/eric_dishman_health_care_should_be_a_team_sport.
  2. Michon, J.D. Kathleen. “Medical Malpractice: Common Errors by Doctors and Hospitals.” Www.nolo.com, www.nolo.com/legal-encyclopedia/medical-malpractice-common-errors-doctor....
  3. “Emily’s Story.” Emily Jerry Foundation, emilyjerryfoundation.org/emilys-story/.





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From my first paper I believed that mistakes in the medical field can have drastic consequences because of minor errors and miss communications. Millions of people have been negatively affected by this and i personally fall under this category. At the end of the day it isn’t one specific person fault but really the lack of reform to do change these problems. These site shows how I believe that it is possible for a positive change to happen and help create a better healthcare system.

This sites is based on the idea that health shouldn’t be something we just take care of at hospital and with our doctors. The best way to maintain a good quality of health is by being proactive instead of reactive. To do that we can no longer rely only on or doctors and caregivers. True health can be reached by making personal choices to better ourselves along with the aid from hospitals and clinics.

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