Rhetorical proposal

 

1.   Identify the text you will analyze. Please provide a bibliographic citation. Why did you choose this text?

 

I choose this text because it brought up very interesting points about the medical community that needed to be addressed. He pointed on one of the major problems in healthcare today which is the large miscommunication between doctors working on a patient as well as the patient's lack of a role. He provided a new way of looking at healthcare.

 

2.   Write a purpose statement that can serve as a guide for your essay. Recall that in an analysis, there is seldom a thesis, but rather a statement that presents the intention and scope of the analysis.

 

Eric Dishman’s speech, Health Care Should Be a Team Sport, uses strategies such as exemplification, description, and narration to argue that patients need to play a bigger role in their own treatment.

 

3.   The goal of a rhetorical analysis is to take into consideration the purpose, audience, genre, stance, and media/design of the given rhetorical situation. In other words, the analysis explores not only what everything means in the given source (content), but also why the author wrote about it (the purpose), who the author is (background), how the piece was organized (structure), where and/or when it was published (forum), and the intended message conveyed to the audience (topic).

1.        Please provide one analytical claim for each of the categories in the description above. (red)

2.        For ONE of the claims you make (a) please provide support from the text. (quote) Show how you will substantiate the claim you are making.

 

Dishmen argues the fact the style of hospitals and clinics are outdated as it hasn’t changed much since.

Purpose- based on the idea that the medical system needs to be updated.

“Humans invented the idea of hospitals and clinics in the 1780s. It is time to update our thinking.”

 

Dishman uses pathos to argue how people would rather avoid hospital trips. He based this of his own personal experiences.  

Audience- hopes that the audience prefers to avoid unnecessary hospital trips.

“because these places are often the wrong tool, and the most expensive tool, for the job.”

Genre-

He argues that more communication is key between health care providers and their patients

Stance- He believes that the hospitals and doctors need to communicate better with patients and each other.

“I want to use technology that we're all working on and making happen to make health care a coordinated team sport.”

 

Dishmen states how he believes people need to also rely on themselves when it comes to their health care.

Media/design- Dishmen uses a live video chat with his doctor along with a showing a live image of his own kidney.

“So we're going to actually do a live exam…”

4.    Given the fact that you will do more analysis / research, from an initial standpoint, do you think your text makes and presents an effective argument?

 

Yes I believe that Dishman’s speech makes an effective argument on the current healthcare system that can be supported by other sources.

 

Work Citied:

(1)   Dishman, Eric, director. Health Care Should Be a Team Sport. Ted.com, Ted, 2013, www.ted.com/talks/eric_dishman_health_care_should_be_a_team_sport.

 

 

 

Intro

 

Hello, my name is Kirby Toussaint and this I the mypage I created. Over the past few months as I created this page that brought different aspects of healthcare together and seemed difficult to find the overarching theme. Ultimately I found that it had been looking be in the face the whole time as my writing had a similar underlying message. This mypage focuses on my interest on the need for change the medical field. This change being that we must be more proactive in healthcare by building a stronger bond between doctors and patients as well as putting more of the patients control in their own hands.

From my first paper I believed that mistakes in the medical field can have drastic consequences because of minor errors and miss communications. Millions of people have been negatively affected by this and i personally fall under this category. At the end of the day it isn’t one specific person fault but really the lack of reform to do change these problems. These site shows how I believe that it is possible for a positive change to happen and help create a better healthcare system.

This sites is based on the idea that health shouldn’t be something we just take care of at hospital and with our doctors. The best way to maintain a good quality of health is by being proactive instead of reactive. To do that we can no longer rely only on or doctors and caregivers. True health can be reached by making personal choices to better ourselves along with the aid from hospitals and clinics.

Thought out this site it can be seen ways that people can take their health into their own hands in a number of ways. Along with this, how we can help with the health of others around. Many people are afraid to help others that battle continuous illness and don't know where to start. In the one of my papers and my PSA i focused on one of these major problems, mental illness. Many Americans today face a daily struggle with this illness as 1 in 5 adults have a mental issue. This is a growing problem that many people face alone because of the lack of awareness and understanding of the issues it causes. When I first started researching this i was very unclear on what the actually issues was with mental health and didn’t know that there so many numerous forms of it. After educating myself on the topic I found it to be something very important to maintain health. A health body starts with a health mind. Many conditions that must Americans have stemmed from a mental illness. The problem is that the stigma around mental illness is very negative and people with it are seen as crazy and incurable. That why this site is focused on education people that health is a continuous battle that can be won through personal care and awareness.